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"Hello 111 whats your emergency?"asked the emergency operator. There was a pause then the lady spoke. The operator couldn't understand what the woman was saying. The lady managed to say her address and what had happened. The operator then sent the FBI to her location.
When they got there they saw a dead bee that was as big as an airplane. They then heard a whimper. Turning their heads, they saw a lady bee crying. The reporter went to the lady and the investigator went to the dead bee.
"Sorry mamm, we couldn't save him" said the investigator. She burst into tears and ran off.
You have got the beginning, middle and ending sussed Brooke - next step is to think carefully about the sowrds that strat each sentence - try using some verbs - like: Arriving on the scene they saw ... - instead of When they got there...
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